exaggerationpoem11

My Teacher

My lovely teacher Mrs.McKone is a very vivid teacher its just that she always gives me a lot of homework that takes me 4 hours a day!!! Its not fair she gave me this assessment to commence to write it today and finish it the next day which means I only have 12 hours to write about a piece of grass and write 50 books about a piece of grass I am like you got to be kidding me!! Today was a vivid and placid day until she said 500 pages of homework.

The first thing I changed was the begging sentence from "My teacher Mrs.McKone is very nice teacher it's just that she gives me a lot of homework" to what I have now.I changed some of my words in my first sentence and put in vocabulary words.

The second thing I changed was my second sentence by being more descriptive things like " ,homework that takes me all day" to what I have up there in my new paragraph and I was more descriptive than what I had before in my old sentence in the begging of the year.

The third thing I changed was more vocabulary words in the third sentence and I made it look more like a poem with the descriptive words and how that day was

The fourth thing that I changed was how the teacher ruined my peaceful day by giving me 500 pages of home work that will take me 8 hours to do.

The last thing I changed was making my work look proventinal