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=Does fame and fortune cost your son?= = = =Are you hoping to be on T.V tonight telling us how you got here?= =Most people well know the balloon boy for his mischievous parents. Falcon Heene is the boy the media thought had been in the balloon that belonged to his father.And this caused the whole media to be all over it.= =And as the parents asked live on camera to there son Falcon why didn't you come down when we called you? He stated that  you said it was for the show .= =His parents have shown their disapproval in their youngest kid Falcon Heene. Now some people comment that it was very entertaining but if you ask me, who would be stupid enough to try to get on T.V and risk your own child?= =I interviewed my class.Was it entertaining?Nick,Markell,Lauren,Kay,Alise,Maddie,and Maiya say that it was a waste of money when they could of been getting money instead of spending at least six years in prison.And there kids in a foster home.= =I have to say I'm actually very happy with this punishment.=

Yvonne, Ooohhhh.... I like this! You have some good, relevant hooks (or lead) into your story. It makes me interested and wanted to read more. It looks like your next steps are to quote some recent news articles about the negative effects of risking your children for reality TV. I have seen some factual reports saying that Falcon threw up on 2 national TV shows, and this shows that his parents are putting him in very stressful situations that are bad to his health. Then, you need to add a personal opinion, about how you would feel if your parents used/abused you to get a TV show, or 15 minutes of fame, or whatever.

Good start! Love, Mrs. McKone