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  A life changing year by: Kay

__Love that dog__ By: Sharon Creech __Life has its up and downs its lefts and right or just obstacles but we can over come them.__ Life is hard for a boy named Jack. The first day of school is how do you put it very frustrating because he is forced to do something that he doesn't want to. He has to write poems about his dog that he had lost not to long ago. So his teacher seeks a poem from Jack but it is not coming out. Then he gives up and gradually gets fixed on writing poems like a bee to a flower.

__In the beginning Jack has trouble writing stories that his teacher instigates him to write.__ Jack says this because “I don't want to because boys don't write poetry. Girls do.” So the teacher pushes and pushes then he finally write one and she like it. So she asks him if she can put it up and he says please don't put my name on it and they read a poem Called tiger tiger shining bright. So the teacher asked Jack if he would try to write a poem.

__In the middle of the book Jack is awakened and loves writing poems.__ Because he writes a poem that the teacher loves about his dog and is in the shape of his dog. Then they read a poem by Mr. Walter Dean Myers and he falls in love with his poems like a squirrel to its nut they just keep getting better at finding then. Then and his poems got even better because he wrote a letter to Mr. Walter Dean Myers and then he wrote back a few days latter and Jack was so psyched.

__At the end of the book Jack is unleashed.__ Jack has practically written his whole life about him and his dog in poems. It is just amazing how a boy can open up like that to me and my mom. Jack writes and writes poem after poem he goes on and on about his dog and the yellowness, and how he ssslllooobbbbeeerrreeeddd all over him when he got home form school.

As you can see life has its up and downs. Its left and rights and its obstacles. So we have to over come like Jack did throughout the year. Now you can understand how this book relates to me.

 I chose this essay because this is a meaning full book to me it really relates to my life and well it is just an amazing essay when you read it out loud. It was the spark in my head that brought me alive.  First I reread the essay and realized I could use better vocab. So I also add in some similes. After I decided what to add in and toke out a thesaurus and studied and studied till I found the perfect words.  The second thing I did was change the ending “As You can see life up and downs. Its left and rights and its obstacles. So we have to over come it like Jack did throughout the year.” To As you can see life up and downs. Its left and rights and its obstacles. So we have to over come it like Jack did throughout the year. Now you can see how this book relates to my life.”  The third thing I did was read over the beginning of every paragraph and changed then so they really hooked the reader.  The fourth thing I did was read over and notices the silly spelling mistakes and the uncompleted sentences and fixed then so the reader is really hooked.  The fifth thing I did was add in more details so the reader could really understand how the book goes and how Jack feels throughout the book.  The sixth thing I did was reread what I had Just finished to make sure it was perfect.  These are all the ways I changed my story and I am proud of the time and effort I put in to it. 