WritersMemo+26

=Writers Memo= BY,Brandon This writing piece was on spending time with my dad, and was from are "Narrative Thinking Works" weeks. But so, This is a part of my life that I do most of the time and Is great because its good spending time with family and devotes more of cooperation and family bond. In "Narrative Thinking Works Week" I thought about events that happened in my past and thought of a time that me and my dad were relatively working on or spending time with each another. When it was time to analyze or writing Narrative, I noticed that there were many errors and I wanted to polish my writing more, As I Continued I wanted to up my thesis and my word choice.

A example of one of my mistakes was, "One day, when it was Saturday morning my dad woke me up and told me to eat but he got my attention when he said " we are going to have noodles (In Vietnamese)" Instead of just editing punctuation I changed it into "Fortnightly Morning, My dad promenaded into my room, and had whispered " Breakfast is ready ". At first he did not catch my attention but what did was " Noodles and Pho". From that point I kew that I was on the right path.

Next, I added extra events that I have left out and added alliteration in some of my work.I made sure that my writing maid since.

I enjoyed my story because this reminds me of how still I spend time my dad. One specific thing is "It was experiences I still now remember."

Finnaly, I was proud of my work and told me that I was truly ready for making my own things"!.I may have had less sentences.

Rewrite -

Fortnightly Morning, My dad promenaded into my room, and had whispered " Breakfast is ready ". At first he did not catch my attention but what did was " Noodles and Pho", In Vietnamese Pho is resplendent noodles. Subsequent, I got out of bed and raced down stairs. My dad had a bowl full of noodles for me, My stomach growling I was so hungry and exited I sucked up the noodles like a vacuumed floor.......Was this the hungry side of me?.Yet such a bother going down stairs,its worth it!. Every Day, I say "Hi" to everyone it the same as my dad! Speechless but still ravenous I asked my dad "What are you going to work on today. My dad told me that he was making a bridge for the water stream" I am still eating, " Is this really my hungry side?.

My dad allowed the potential but not that unsafe things, What I could do " Ok dad". I scattered out side and seeing the array of the brige it was magnifcently crafted." You are so good with building bridges!" I started with the basic things just started to nail the log piece without dads instructions,thump thump thump I thought in my mind again "

"We Finalized everything all there is to do is painting" "OK... so lets start dad ... " "No I think inside", Why did I have to do such a restricted amount?.

Next, Day I see my dad standing top of the bridge, I join like water going into water, But do you know whats amusing? " Dad still owes me a father and dad time to make up for just the little time for my work.