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=Balloon Selfishness= =By:Markell=

=Is the world becoming a selfish place?= =Most people will do anything to get on TV but its never gone this far. Falcon Heene was suppose to be sent up in a balloon but instead hid in the attic because his parents said it was all for the show and money. Mr. Heene asked the young kid why he didn`t come when they called him the kid right in front of all the cameras said "you said it was just for the show" and that was that balloon boy was a fake.= =The charge might be six years of jail and then send the kids to a foster home until the parents get out.= =Many parents have their opinion on this fake some say that it was really dumb to do that because you basically you throw away your life.= =I got to see what some of my fifth grade class thinks about this, Kay,Alise and Lauren said that the balloon thing was stupid and that it was a waste of money instead of their plan by earning money.= =My opinion on this situation is that it completely stupid dumb pathetic and a waste of money I think the charges should be BIG like I sort of agree on that six years in jail and send the kids to a foster home the jail thing I think the parents deserve it but I think the kids should go to a relatives house. Now all we know is to check the news paper until the results come up.=

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Markell, You have a catchy introduction by starting with a question. Lots of editorial writers start with that so that their reader begins thinking about the topic. You also did a nice job quickly giving the background story about what happened. Now, it's time to use the next paragraph to explain your opinion about how or why the world is becoming selfish. Good start! Love, Mrs. McKone