journalism++editorial4

Dogs Dogs.The self-explanatory and thickset word that, over time, has changed the way we see that waggy tail .That tail has saved numerous lives, helped us protrude on and evolved the country. Where would we be without dogs?

Many dogs may seem bothersome and even worthless to many abusive owners, but not me. No matter how worthless a dog may seem, no dog is inutile to me. The most prodigious dog story is the story of Oreo. The boxer was thrown off a six story apartment building suffering from a severe head injury and broken leg. The owner was arrested for animal cruelty. One week later, Oreo was euthanized for severely injuring the press countless times.Oreo was downcastly euthanized on December first 2008.

Then a story on 7 news a story reports that many sled dogs have been found in the mountains without food or water. They claim that a musher had left them there after a trip to the mountains. Many died of starvation and others barely alive and were brought to a shelter. Channel 9 news said that channel 7 was totally lying and that the dogs were rescued from an alleyway and brought to a shelter and put up for adoption. which is true? Which do I believe?

Dogs are indefenetly more ubiquitous than cats and have a ceremonious conniption and predominantly listen to adjuration. They don`t have a know-how-and-where fatal flaw. Curiosity killed the cat. Fatal kitty. Sheesh. Dogs are easily friends with anyone who they feels has a lot to say for them. They feel a sort of connection, sort of like a bee to flowers or fish to water or even pen and ink. Dogs are a phenomenal mammal and a great addition to our world.

Many shelter owners and staff agree that many dogs and cats that have any black are not getting affiliated much or at all.The result is Black Dog Syndrome. Though it is not a disease, many intellectualize it is. Many shelters are currently doing a buy one get the second free, as long as it has some black. clearly, dogs are altering us, very moderately. This invasive "disease" has cost many black dogs their lives, as well as cats, for people don`t care of dark color ,and possibly, personality.



Writer`s Memo

One thing I changed in my editorial was my lead sentence. I added more advanced(average for me) words and I added some of my own thinking to express my opinion more. Further details explain my point that dogs are very utile. I wanted to add an opinion to give it "tone" or"color". I put it there to catch the reader's attention and hook them to read more.

I added a story to support my lead sentence. It helped make it more interesting and give the reader an idea of what I'm talking about. I told a story about a dog who was thrown off a six story building and lived to "tell the tale". I meant to express my opinion and make it crystal clear to the reader. All it is is just a story. A supporting story.

My next paragraph stated an argument between channel 7 and 9 news, claiming one another lied. The argument was over DOGS and where they were found. Either way the dogs were found and taken to shelters to be cared for. Either way, the dogs were saved and either way the dogs are sled dogs. Dogs.

I wanted to add a part about comparing cats to dogs to see my reason and take my side. I need them to see that dogs are precious animals and need us as we need them. It is an essential to love a dog, even if you only see pictures. i wanted to tell them that dogs are only here while they`re here. When they`re here, they`re here. When they1re gone. Same for cats.

Shelters are filling up with dogs and cats from all over. alleyways, street sides,even trash cans. Unwanted dogs are thrown out to fend for themselves, alone. Dogs are supposed to be loved and cared for their lives. They need love to thrive. They need care to live. We can give it and take it away. Let them have it. Adopt a dog at a shelter.

This story has a lot of major changes. I wanted to make this piece truly the best piece of my fifth grade year. I wanted to use an enhanced vocabulary to explain what i mean. I mean dogs. Dogs are a great addition to our world. We have to respect that. Have to. They respect it, so why can`t we?