One+Little+Coin+21+Memo

1. I picked this peace because it is my all time favorite peace of the 5th grade. I worked harder on this peace than any other peace ever. It took a lot of planning and a lot of thinking out what I was going to right for this peace. I had a lot of ideas bouncing around but I new that all the planning that I had done had fit together and made a story that I would love.

2. The first place where I changed something was in the second paragraph where I said it was being hard on the family I changed it. Now it is hearting breaking to the family.

3. The second spot where I changed something was in the forth paragraph. It just said thats it which was kind of boring. So I changed it to all caps so it stands out a lot more than before.

4. The third spot where I changed something was in the eleventh paragraph and where it said they fainted. I changed to they fainted with happiness.

5.The fourth spot where I changed was in the last paragraph where in the end it said satisfied with there money. I changed it to satisfied with there money and just thinking about there future.

6. The last spot where I changed something was in the 8th paragraph where it just said on the stuff. I changed it to on the old and mysterious stuff.